Heartbreak

Writers block is at its peak now, I am writing but nothing seems good, nothing is satisfying me. There are so many unfinished pieces that I am loosing patience. Anyway, I was told by someone to write about ‘not being able to write’ so here is an attempt.
As always your comments are more than welcome.
Happy reading!
 
                   HEARTBREAK

Why wasn’t it flowing?
Like that enthralling river 
Running down the mountain, dodging the rocks,
Like that one drop of tear which was stuck in the eye for so long
That even after it dropped, the pain it melted seemed less torturous,
Like the period blood which 
oozed out and endorsed my virginity,
Like the sweat which swirled down the neck emancipating the exhaustion from the body.

Why was my ink so stubborn to release itself? 
I changed a hundred pens but the blue ink remained rigid,
Strong in its position, not even willing to move a centilitre.

“Hey! Why don’t you liberate yourself?” I asked the ink.
“Why don’t you let yourself out?” She shot back.
Stunned by her answer, silence enclosed me for a moment. 
“I chose my words to do that.” I said embarrassingly.
“Oh really? But your words are hollow, they lack profoundness.” She replied.
Who would know my words better than her;
Understand the depth of them more than her?
Perhaps, she was telling the truth.

The blue liquid shattered me, 
But along with me, 
She spilled herself out on my hands. 

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57 Comments Add yours

  1. Ashish kumar says:

    The sense of dissatisfaction along with the unanswered questions that is being felt by a writer including me is beautifully described by you in the form of this gem like poem… I think the sense of dissatisfaction is the root which enables to write better and better. The enthusiasm which makes to think that this literary piece is not what I desired and then you come up with a better new piece in your next post. Its all about learning and improving the way one writes and I think this kind of dilemma is good where you are never satisfied with your own work and that too results in a better work from the previous one. This should be taken in a positive manner… ๐Ÿ™‚ This will keep you writing and writing and you can reach excellence and the day when you are satisfied with your own writing, you may probably stop writing… ๐Ÿ™‚

    A masterpiece creation from your side… ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thank you for these lovely words. I am flattered.
      I know the previous piece was not that nice. ๐Ÿ˜›

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      1. Ashish kumar says:

        Hmmm… That’s why you came out with this brilliant creation and the upcoming one will be more better than this(according to you…) ๐Ÿ™‚
        Every literary piece has something in it. It’s better not to compare… ๐Ÿ™‚

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      2. I know, you are right.
        Anyway, thanks again.

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  2. swamiyesudas says:

    Ashish has said it well, my Dear Srishti! You HAVE written this piece quite well, and my Congratulations to You.

    We are Our Own Worst Critics, and that is Not a bad thing. This prevents Us from getting satisfied with Mediocrity, as Ashish has said.

    YET, I would suggest that You start appreciating Yourself and Your work more.

    There are people who write, when they get a contract, just filling in pages. But people like You, Ashish and me write, We do it because something pushes Us to do so!

    And that something may be God, (depending on the circumstances), the Situation, a Need, or things like that. We have to Respect the Force that is Impelling Us too!

    Love and Regards. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thanks for reading and appreciating. ๐Ÿ™‚

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      1. swamiyesudas says:

        It was Worth that! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. Srishti, I know writer’s block is not fun but this piece you wrote is brilliant. I think the block is over, keep writing ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. I hope the block is over, but I am afraid it’s not.
      Thank you for reading jennifer.:D

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  4. Vamagandhi says:

    You’ve done it!!

    Writer’s block is myth. Our mind would always be in some state-excited verbose or too occupied to chose words. In both states, it would give unique flavor.

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    1. Hehe, thank you for reading and appreciating. But writers block whatever you say it is, is torturous.

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  5. I am not a writer and do not intend to start as I would be blocked at page one! If you keep adding and changing ingredients to the evening meal you are cooking, no one is going to get to eat, and what they get may not be edible! You must put a period at the end of it, and move on. Try something different–write something shorter and perhaps a bit brighter–a sonnet or even a Haiku. Putting a great thought in a few words is challenging. Doing something because you think you have to post is a pressure that is detrimental to creativity. We followers will be here regardless

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    1. I will definitely give your words a thought. I require some sort of pressure to work actually. ๐Ÿ˜› But all the same, I will try something different as you said.

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  6. Nena says:

    Wow! It worked beautifully to write about you are currently feeling:)

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    1. Thanks Nena, just trying to take an advantage of it. ๐Ÿ˜›

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      1. Nena says:

        Keep doing it!

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  7. stacilys says:

    Bravo! I think that this piece broke your block, my friend. Great piece.
    ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thank you for your kind words. I hope it breaks my block. ๐Ÿ™‚

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  8. It’s always difficult to express what one feels like in the form of writing….at least I face it quite often….especially if I have to limit my words. But I think you have written this piece so beautifully. Great work Srishti

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    1. Thank you very much!

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  9. Garfield Hug says:

    I thought this was a nicely wriiten piece ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ˜Š

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    1. Thank you so much! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  10. wwwpalfitness says:

    Reblogged this on wwwpalfitness.

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    1. That was INfinity indeed. Srishti getting into the grove so brillianly and writing with passion. Ashish has been right on trot to bring in best out of this lovely writer. Hope see many more

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      1. Thank you for your wonderful words! ๐Ÿ™‚

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      2. wwwpalfitness says:

        I am glad you read it all and realized it was hers and not mine. I reblog gems or at least I try to

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      3. wwwpalfitness says:

        e welcome:)

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  11. Saloni says:

    This is excellent, even when you say ‘writer’s block’.

    I nominated you for the Three Day Quote Challenge if youโ€™d consent to join. You can check out the rules in my post:

    https://vintagesapience.wordpress.com/2015/11/22/three-day-quote-challenge-day-1/

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    1. Hey there thanks!
      Thanks again for the nomination. I will do it soon.

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  12. agenda19892010 says:

    Have a happy sunday my friend!

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  13. Upen Reddy says:

    Buddy,double thumbs up for this gem of a poem ๐Ÿ™‚
    Cheers!!

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    1. Thank you, buddy! ๐Ÿ˜€

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      1. Upen Reddy says:

        No more writer’s block:P.

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      2. It is still clinging to my mind. But I have come to live with it. ๐Ÿ˜›

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      3. Upen Reddy says:

        :D. Inseparable eh?;)

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      4. Ye-ah we are soulmates. :p ^_^

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      5. Upen Reddy says:

        lol. try to write a poem on your exams:)

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      6. Umm, that’s difficult. Lol

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      7. Upen Reddy says:

        try.. i am sure you will come with an amazing poem:)

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      8. I am not sure. I should well study.

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      9. Upen Reddy says:

        okay. All the best!!

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  14. Do I have to say anything, again ๐Ÿ˜› This poem gave me chills and I was stunned by its beauty ๐Ÿ˜‰ The words were MashaAllah ๐Ÿ˜€ Awesome! That somebody did a right job of giving you a topic to write upon ๐Ÿ˜›

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    1. That somebody already is at cloud nine after knowing that it was because of him I wrote a poem. ๐Ÿ˜›
      Anyway, thank you! :*

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      1. Good for you & that somebody ๐Ÿ˜› You should have informed that person about his contribution ๐Ÿ˜€ Acha hua padha usne warna pata b nahi chalta ๐Ÿ˜‰ Welcome ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  15. Writing through writers block is sort of like exercising through arthritis , It hurts while you are doing it but the results make it worthwhile. Thanks for sharing !

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    1. Thank you for reading!

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  16. surindernath says:

    No one writes !!

    It is like getting pregnant. Once I get pregnant delivery is assured.
    But then getting pregnant is a tricky business.

    Some don’t want and get it
    Some want and don’t get it !!

    Our Creator is a naughty playboy !!

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  17. Jeni G.J says:

    This made me smile.you’ve written so well about writer’s block and I’m wondering where is the block?you’ve a wonderful blog.thanks for the follow.

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    1. Hey there!
      Thanks for the lovely comment. Believe me, I am perpetually in a writer’s block. ๐Ÿ˜› Thanks for stopping by yourself. I was just going through yours. You’ve got some really nice pieces yourself.

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      1. Jeni G.J says:

        Thank you.Don’t worry.you can come out of it soon.Yeah I know you were reading mine and I was reading yours.I’m yet to read many of your posts.

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      2. Jeni G.J says:

        Congratulations on getting 400 followers..just block the block that’s troubling you.gudnyt

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      3. Thank you very much.
        Good night!

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